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| Because most transactions require a permanent record. Good writing skills are critical. | Fragment - Because most transactions require a permanent record, good writing skill are critical. |
| The recruiter requested a writing sample. Even though the candidate seemed to communicate well. | Fragment - The recruiter requested a writing sample, even though the candidate seemed to communicate well. |
| Most job seekers present a printed resume some are also using Web sites as electronic portfolios. | Run-on - Most job seekers present a printed resume; some are also using Web sites as electronic portfolios. |
| Some employees responded by e-mail, others picked up the telephone. | Comma Splice - Some employees responded by e-mail; others picked up the telephone. |
| One business uses personal selling techniques. | Emhasis Through Style - Avon uses face-to-face selling techniques. |
| A customer said that he wanted the contract returned soon. | Emhasis Through Style - Mr. Le Clerc insisted that the contract be returned by July 1. |
| The tax return was completed before the April 15 deadline. | Passive Voice - Mr. Johnson completed the tax return before the April 15 deadline. |
| The market for industrial goods includes manufacturers, contractors, wholesalers, and those concerned with the retail function. | Parallelism - The market for industrial goods includes manufacturers, contractors, wholesalers, and retailers. |
| Our primary goals are to increase productivity, reduce costs, and the improvement of product quality. | Parallelism - Our primary goals are to increase productivity, reduce costs, and improve product quality. |
| We are scheduled to meet in Dallas on January 5, we are meeting in Montreal on the 15th of March, and in Chicago on June 3. | Parallelism - We are scheduled to meet in Dallas on January 5, in Montreal on March 15, and in Chicago on June 3. |
| Mrs. Horne audits all accounts lettered A through L; accounts lettered M through Z are audited by Mr. Shapiro. | Parallelism - Mrs. Horne audits all accounts lettered A through L; Mr. Shapiro audits accounts lettered M through Z. |
| Our insurance plan is available in all the states and provinces, and you may name anyone as a beneficiary for your coverage. | Unity - Our insurance plan is available in all the states and provinces. What's more, you may name anyone as a beneficiary for your coverage. |
| I appreciate the time you spent with me last week, and I have purchased a computer and software that generate graphics. | Zigzag Writing - I appreciate the time you spent with me last week. As a result of your advice, I have purchased a computer and software that generate graphics. |
| The stockholders of a corporation elect a board of directors, although the chief executive officer is appointed by the board and the CEO is not directly responsible to the stockholders. | Zigzag Writing - The stockholders of a corporation elect a board of directors, who in turn appoints the chief executive officer. The CEO is not directly responsible to the stockholders. |
| The reason I am late is because my car battery is dead. | Mixed Construction - The reason I am late is that my car battery is dead. |
| When the stock market index rose five points was our signal to sell. | Mixed Construction - When the stock market index rose five points, we were prepared to sell (or Our signal to sell was an increase of five points in the stock market index). |
| Paragraph of ten lines | Paragraph Length - Paragraphs should contain no more than eight printed lines. |
| To win the lottery, a ticket must be purchased. | Dangling/Misplaced Modifiers - To win the lottery, you must purchase a ticket. |
| Driving through Malibu Canyon, the ocean suddenly came into view. | Dangling/Misplaced Modifiers - Driving through Malibu Canyon, we saw the ocean suddenly come into view. |
| Seeing his error too late, the envelope was immediately resealed by Matt. | Dangling/Misplaced Modifiers - Seeing his error too late, Matt immediately resealed the envelope. |
| A wart appeared on my left hand that I want removed. | Dangling/Misplaced Modifiers - A wart that I want removed appeared on my left hand. |
| The busy personnel director interviewed only candidates who had excellent computer skills in the morning. | Dangling/Misplaced Modifiers - In the morning the busy personnel director interviewed only candidates who had excellent computer skills. |
